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My rainbow cake about cross country

Make a copy and name it ‘Analysing my writing T3’ and file in writing. Delete this when you are done.

Week 4  Writing: Cross Country Race

WALT: analyse my writing using the rubrics to assess and score my writing

SUCCESS CRITERIA:

I know I will be successful when I can

• Know what level I will use
• identify the different elements and show what they are in my writing by highlighting these examples
• comment on what I have achieved
• comment on my next learning

Indicators Writing Rubric		My Writing - Cross Country	My thoughts
Ideas	4	Cross Country     As my breathing got heavier I was  feeling light headed.  Only footsteps away from Konrad.  Huffing and puffing  as I got to the hill I struggled to get up every step I took it got harder every breath got heavier  as my throat got dryer as the seconds go past.  Sweat dripped into my eyes stinging with salt.  The struggle was real, I felt the excruciating pain go right through my body. Finally reaching the top then WOOSH I bolted down the hill like a bullet. Then I went through the puddle SPLISH SPLASH keeping my pace with Konrad still footsteps away Adults and kids cheering for us “GO GO GO” I pick up my pace trying my hardest to get  in front of Konrad but his pace is  too quick for me then ZOOM he leaves dust in my eyes.Then my second attempt to run up the hill but it had no faze on me . I passed the finish line 2 laps down 1 more to go I tried my hardest to catch up to Konrad but he sprints ahead of me like a blink of an eye I still carry on not giving up I was on my last lap jogging my fastest. I fly past people like the speed of a cheetah WOOSH I sprint up the hill my fastest then I go ZOOMING down the hill I could already hear children yelling “KONRAD!- KONRAD”!   Then I came around the corner sprinting my hardest and I saw Konrad past the finish line coming in first place then I hear “AREKA! AREKA!” I carried on to the finish line coming in second congratulating Konrad for his win.	Ive put in two ideas and I have elaborated  my ideas
Structure and Language	5		I have elaborated on parts on my writing by showing an dnot telling
Organisation	4		I have organised my writing well and it has good flow
Vocabulary	3		I have only used 1 good word in my but I can use more
Sentence Structure	5		My sentence structure is good it makes my writing flow
Punctuation	5		I have used  plenty of punctuation in my writing
Spelling	4		I have spelt all my words correct in my writing

List 3 things that you think you did well in this text. (not punctuation or capital letters or spelling)

1.my sentence structure

2.structure and language

3.my ideas I used in my writing

What do you need to work on to improve your writing?

How to analyse my writing

Ingredients:

• My Cross Country writing
• A copy of the matrix
• The Read Write tool
• The Writing Rubric
• A copy of the rainbow cake ( to refer to only)
• A reliable person (who knows how to use the rubric) to help and support me

Method:

Turn my thinking cap on to (200 degrees) focus on.  Make a copy of the writing matrix.  Name it and file it in my writing.

When I have finished my writing make a copy and add it to my  matrix under My Writing.

Read through my writing to make sure it is clear in my head.  Click and open the writing rubric in the Indicator box.

With my partner, I read the ideas indicator in level 4 , 5, and 6 and talk with my partner to say whether my writing is a level 4 , 5, or a 6 and why.  I can say ( I think it is this because……..) and I highlight what these may look like in my writing.  I then can copy the indicator into the far right box where it says ideas.  I can decide to use all or those that is relevant to my writing. Check that our thinking cap is still in focus.

I work through all the other indicators with my partner until I have completed all parts of the rainbow cake. CHECK WITH ME!

Add the icing, by writing comments about three things you did well in your writing, what your next learning steps will be

And place your cake on your blog.  DO NOT ADD THIS RECIPE. COPY ONLY THE WALT & THE SC, THE MATRIX AND THE COMMENTS.

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